Tastes are subjective,so here goes:
H.G.
what is the sound of a tape erased?
what does a photo look like with a scratched out face?
change history,
can't get back time in its place
retreating scissor blade across wrist skin
I regret that you weren't just merely a friend;
you go forward with her,upward to downward
spiral for me begins
change history,can't get back
lost time,never again
high-pitch voices,lines through
you,reversed walking feet
"herIloveyounotlifespendrestof
girlIwishwaslifemycomplete..."
pull away lips
backwards through the door
over.done.edit.
my love.
delete.
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lunanegra
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Aug 17 @ 3:15AM
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By me,of course....
Feedback if you want.(shrug)
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partytimemary
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Aug 17 @ 8:43AM
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Very Very Powerful words Luna...... your pain and emotions just pour out of this poem. Life's experiences do one thing for us - make us stronger, more resilient individuals. Some of us just have more experience than others. 
I am sorry for your pain ~ seems to me you need a hug 
Excellent writing!
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soft_touch938
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Aug 17 @ 9:28AM
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Very intense. Words help release pain and bring scattered thoughts to clarity. Writing is good for the soul. Write. Learn. Grow. And take all the hugs you can get.... 
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LickMyClit
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Aug 17 @ 10:40AM
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Ahhh, a serious writer. Thank you A kudo for you.
Beautifully done! 
~*~
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theSkwirl
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Aug 17 @ 10:49AM
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Your 'bad' poetry... not so bad.
Huggers lady..
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lunanegra
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Aug 17 @ 1:01PM
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Thank you ladies,thank you. I guess that poem was a result of being loopy on wine and wallowing in sadness.I was afraid it would be too disturbing,but I took a crack at it anyway. I'm glad you liked it.
And yes,I do take hugs very freely.
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Sunshine79
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Aug 17 @ 3:35PM
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Different, I liked it. 
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lunanegra
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Aug 17 @ 4:32PM
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Thanks.
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